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I was a pupil at St Francis of Assisi School and this blog is where I shared my learning.This blog has been archived, no further content will be uploaded or added. You are welcome to continue viewing posts, however commenting has been disabled.
Before
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Peter went to Kapiti College a state run secondary school but dropped out at the age of 16 so that he could get a job to finance his film hobby.
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Peter went big after Bad Taste in 1989 Bad taste was a sifi 1 hour and 32 minute movie. Bad Taste was made on a low budget of 11 thousand us dollars it is Jackson's first feature film.
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Jackson's family bought their first TV when he was 5 years old and the world of television immediately captured his young imagination, especially a futuristic English sci-fi show called Thunderbirds 1965-66.
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After
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Peter went to Kapiti College, a state-run secondary school. He dropped out at the age of 16 so that he could get a job to finance his film hobby.
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In 1989, Peter went big after Bad Taste. Bad taste was a sifi 1 hour and 32 minute movie.
Bad Taste was made on a low budget of 11 thousand US dollars, it was Jackson's first feature film.
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Jackson's family bought their first TV when he was 5 years old. The world of television immediately captured his young imagination, especially a futuristic English sci-fi show called Thunderbirds 1965-66.
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Things to consider when editing
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Make sure your sentences make sense.
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Use a thesaurus and a dictionary.
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Would your reader be able to understand it.
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Before
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Peter went to Kapiti College a state run secondary school but dropped out at the age of 16 so that he could get a job to finance his film hobby.
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Peter went big after Bad Taste in 1989 Bad taste was a sifi 1 hour and 32 minute movie. Bad Taste was made on a low budget of 11 thousand us dollars it is Jackson's first feature film.
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After
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Peter went to Kapiti College, a state-run secondary school. He dropped out at the age of 16 so that he could get a job to finance his film hobby.
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In 1989, Peter went big after Bad Taste. Bad taste was a sifi 1 hour and 32 minute movie.
Bad Taste was made on a low budget of 11 thousand US dollars, it was Jackson's first feature film.
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What I changed
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I put a comma after collage.
I put a hyphen in between state and run.
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I put in 1989, in front of, peter went big after bad taste and I put a comma in front of 1989.
I put a full stop after the first bad taste to make the the sentence shorter.
I also made US with a capital because it's a name of a place.
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