Before
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Peter went to Kapiti College a state run secondary school but dropped out at the age of 16 so that he could get a job to finance his film hobby.
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Peter went big after Bad Taste in 1989 Bad taste was a sifi 1 hour and 32 minute movie. Bad Taste was made on a low budget of 11 thousand us dollars it is Jackson's first feature film.
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After
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Peter went to Kapiti College, a state-run secondary school. He dropped out at the age of 16 so that he could get a job to finance his film hobby.
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In 1989, Peter went big after Bad Taste. Bad taste was a sifi 1 hour and 32 minute movie.
Bad Taste was made on a low budget of 11 thousand US dollars, it was Jackson's first feature film.
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What I changed
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I put a comma after collage.
I put a hyphen in between state and run.
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I put in 1989, in front of, peter went big after bad taste and I put a comma in front of 1989.
I put a full stop after the first bad taste to make the the sentence shorter.
I also made US with a capital because it's a name of a place.
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